Have you ever read a novel and wanted to change something that happened in one of the chapters, or the outcome of the story? If you answered yes to this question, then you are in luck! This is your chance to change something from your novel. Think back to what happened at the end of the story (or a specific section of your novel) and ask yourself these questions when rewriting it:
1.) What would you change about the story?
2.) Why would you change it?
3.) How will the change affect the story?
4.) Will it change the plot of the story drastically?
5.) What questions do you have after changing what happened?
i would change a thing in the story Devils Arithmetic. My change is almost at the end of story. The scene that i would love to change is when is when the big terribly mean Nazis grabbed Hannah and others in a really small cart with no food,water and washroom. (The change)- It would be better if the story went like this... The Nazis took the Yewish people including Hannah out of the small cart and when they got them out, every Nazi started giving them food, water and a washroom. i changed this part of the story because i felt sad when the Nazi dumped them in the cart with no food , water or washroom. the questions i have after changing what happened is '' Why did they do that'' ''Why are the Nazis so mean?'' It would change the story to a happy ending instead of a bad and sad ending because everyone ended safe and not tortured.
ReplyDeleteI like how you thought about that because it would make the Jewish people probably feel a tad bit happier. Although it would be nice for the Nazis to do that I personally don't think they would being the fact that they are there to slowly eliminate the Jewish population. But besides my thoughts it was pretty good. A few things that you could fix are:
Delete1) Add quotations to the title of the story.
2) Fix your spelling of Jewish, you wrote Yewish although I'm sure that that was just a small typo.
3) Explain more of the dialogue of how it actually played out.
4) Explain how you think that the story would play out after that because that will effect the story.
Overall good job.
One thing I would change in the book " The Devils Arithmetic " is that instead of just Hannah going into the past, her brother Aaron comes with her. I would change it because it would be more of an adventure and if they got separated in my opinion, it would be more exciting too! The change would mean, Hannah wouldn't be alone in her somewhat dream, she would be more responsible because now she has to watch over Aaron and make sure he stays alive in the camp. And now both Hannah and Aaron know why it's so important to remember what the Nazis did to the Jewish religion. A question I have is, will Hannah and Aaron tell everyone they know about the Nazis and the camps? Or will they keep it to themselves?
ReplyDeleteGreg I think That would be much more exiting and i also like how you added a question mark at the end But maybe add a transition or 2 Good job!!!!
DeleteIf I could change any part of the book "The Devils Arithmetic" I would change the end. I didn't really like how Chaya decided to trade places with Rivka and then it just stopped and went back to the modern times. I would have liked it to have explained a little bit about what Rivka did after and how she felt about what Hannah/Chaya did. This would have given a better explanation of what went on afterwords with Gitl and how Aunt Eva became.
ReplyDeleteWhat I change the book to:
As she spoke she shoved Rivka away, untied the kerchief with trembling fingers, and retied it to her own head. Then, as Rivka's footsteps faded behind her Hannah thought of Gitl and how she will have to deal with the death of her niece, and how Rivka will sadly need to spread the news. After knowing Hannah's sacrifice Rivka knew she had to do whatever it took to survive. For Chaya she would do it.
After seeing Rivka run off Hannah walked purposefully, head high, after Shifre and Ester. When she caught up with them, she put he arms around her waist as if they were three school girls just walking in the yard.
And then the rest of the book as it is.
I would change one part of the ending. It would be when the Nazis take Hannah and here friends, when there in that cart and have no food or water and they cant even use the washroom. I think it would sound like this if they took that part out, it would sound like this " The Nazis left the room and Hannah and her friends snook out of the cart and left..." It would change the story because it wouldnt be that sad at the ending of the story. I dont really have any questions for this story.
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Delete- There are some grammar and punctuation and spelling mistakes. For the second sentence, you spelled 'here' and 'there' wrong. I think you mean by 'hear' and 'they're'.
- Why would you change the story? Don't just say you changed the story because, you were sad. Give more detail.
Over all well done!
i would change the part were hannah has to go into a car with people and they take her some were she doesn"t know and how they have no food or water no space to even talk. I would change this because then hannah could see her family again. This change will affect the story because then it woulden"t be so sad i think that it will change the plot drastically because then hannah would go back to were she was will hannah get out of that car
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job on this assignment, but you need to capitalize "I" and people's name. Also, you need to add a period at the end of the paragraph.
Delete( REVISED) I would change the part were Hannah has to go into a car with people and they take her some were she doesn"t know and how they have no food or water no space to even talk. I would change this because then Hannah could see her family again. This change will affect the story because then it woulden't be so sad i think that it will change the plot drastically because then hannah would go back to were she was will Hannah get out of that car.
DeleteI would change the part where she is going into the past but instead she brings some one along with her like maybe her brother Aron. Also if she has some one with her she might not have been so confused when she goes back and maybe together they could find away back.
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DeleteNice job dragon! Instead of saying she without explain who " she " is. However, you have just a little spelling error, this is how you spell Aaron, not Aron. Also, I sort of had the same idea too! You did an awesome job overall!
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DeleteI would change the part where Hannnah is transported back into the past. Also instead of her going alone she would have her brother Aaron be with her the whole way. Also it might have helped her not be so confused when all that happened maybe Aaron might have been able to help her get back to the present.
1.) In my opinion, I would change the beginning of the story and how Hannah is sent to the past and enters another's body. She becomes Chaya and to me this dose not make a lot of sense.
ReplyDelete2.) I would change this part of the story because in my opinion it dose not make sense to fall asleep and wake up in the past... obviously this happened because she needed to learn a lessen but what happened to here body in her time... did it just lay there or did it magically disappear for the time being?
3.)This beginning is a big part of the story and if it were not there the story would probably start with Chaya in here home and the story would not be as "fun" as it is before my changes but it would make a lot more sense. This change would also mean she did not have experiences as hannah and lots of thing throughout the story.
4.) This would probably cause major problems in the story and the novel would not be the book it is, but it would make more sense to me and probably others so i say it would be a good and bad change.
5.) Could Chaya possibly feel a connection with hannah? Would Chaya recognize the black trucks and cars at the wedding? Would Chaya be Chaya or would she be Chaya?
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DeleteIn chapter 17, they had an escape plan. At night the started it, but it didn't work out as planned. Shmuel, and Yizchak were captured and then killed. I didn’t like how the plan didn’t work. It just made me sad that they didn’t even get out. If I were allowed to change it I would, and it would go like this: Gitl told Hannah the night before they were going to escape and gave her all the details of it. In the days before some of the men slowly dug a hole under the fences. They were going to go around the back of the ghettoes, silently, and meet up with Shmuel, Yizchak, and the others. Then they escaped under the fence. They then run for their lives, as the Nazis chase them. Gitl shoves Hannah into a bush, while she keeps running. Gitl gets caught, along with Shmuel, and some other men. Hannah stays in her hiding place until morning, and then runs as fast as she can. She arrives in a little village in the evening, exhausted, and asks a young man walking by if she could have some food. The fellow takes Hannah into her home, feeds Hannah some bread, then lets Hannah stay the night. The man keeps Hannah with her because she wants to help the Jews. One day, the young man went outside to get some food, and told Hannah to stay inside. While he was gone, Hannah heard footsteps outside and peeked out the window. There were 2 Nazis going by, and they saw her. They knocked on the door, and she didn’t answer. They waited a bit, then busted down the door came in and shot Hannah for being a Jew and escaping. went went to bed, and woke up, standing in front of the door waiting for the prophet Elijah. Turns out, the young man was her grandfather, and he ran away when he saw the Nazis coming out of his house. He survived the war.
ReplyDeleteA part of this novel that I would change would be the part near the beginning when everybody got into the train cart and it was right before the wedding ceremony. I think it would have been a lot more interesting if it happened while the wedding ceremony was happening. I think the story would have been completely different when I change it.
ReplyDeleteThe change to the novel:
I think that if the wedding ceremony was happening and the Nazi soldiers smashed through the doors of the wedding place then they took everyone and everyone else in the town. Once the Nazi soldiers bashed through the doors and took everybody I think that all of the people would be a lot more mad then they already are because of the big dark cart they are stuffed into.
If I could change any part in the story I would re-write the beginning of the book. I would do this because to me the whole "Hannah opening the door as Hannah then but seeing a wide open field, and turning around to ask her grandpa how he did it but, is now magically being some girl Chaya" makes no sense to me. I found this part of the story a little hard to read, but I think that part was put there to show Hannah had knowledge of the future and could change the present. However, in the book her memory of the future leaves her, so I find that part irrelevant. Without out the beginning of the story being the way it was it wouldn't have changed the story line or plot all that much. The only thing it would change is the part at the end where she is back in present day with a new appreciation for her grandparents past. I would have made the beginning in the same time period as the rest of the story. Perhaps Chaya (Hannah) would have woken up the day of the wedding excited to meet her new auntie (or something like that, with more detail though).
ReplyDeleteThe part I would change in this book, would be how in the end nobody but Aunt Eva and Hannah knew about what happened. I'm one of those people that don't like keeping secrets, and I would want everyone to know about this and realize that something incredible happened! I don't think this would affect the story much, or the plot of the story.
ReplyDeleteI would change the beginning of the story where Hannah goes to the past. If Aaron went to the past instead of Hannah, would it be a whole different story? I'm very curious about that. I think this would affect the story very much.
ReplyDeleteThe part that would change in the book would be near the end where Chaya and Rivka switched places and it just came back to reality, I would change it so that the book will go on longer and it will be more interesting. I think this will affect the story but not of the story.
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DeleteI think you did a good job but I have a few edits for you. To begin, your first few words you said "The part that would change in the book" I think you meant to say "The part that I would change in the book". Another thing I have to say is the last sentence does not make any sense you may want to change that. Lastly, you may want to add more details. Good job though
i would change a thing in the story Devils Arithmetic. My change is almost at the end of story. The scene that i would love to change is when is when the big terribly mean Nazis grabbed Hannah and others in a really small cart with no food,water and washroom. (The change)- It would be better if the story went like this... The Nazis took the Jewish people including Hannah out of the small cart and when they got them out, every Nazi started giving them food, water and a washroom. i changed this part of the story because i felt sad when the Nazi dumped them in the cart with no food , water or washroom. the questions i have after changing what happened is '' Why did they do that'' ''Why are the Nazis so mean?'' It would change the story to a happy ending instead of a bad and sad ending because everyone ended safe and not tortured.
ReplyDeleteIf I could change any part of this story, I would change the part where only Hannah goes back in time.
ReplyDeleteI would change it by having her and her little brother, Aaron, go to the past together. I think this would be more interesting, and it would also show Aaron what had happened when Hitler was around, and what their family had been through. This probably will change the plot a bit, because Hannah would have to take care of Aaron.
Some questions I would have would be: How long will they be in the past? Will they survive? Where is their family?
A part of the story I would change would be at the start of the story when Hannah goes back in time to the concentration camp. i would change it so maybe one of her family members or friends went back in time with her i think that would have made the story more interesting because she would not have to go thorough all that by herself she would of had a person to talk to that she knew in reality. I would have also changed one more thing about the story and that is when hannah goes back into real life I would have liked to see Hannah try to escape the camp I think that would have been more exiting instead of her just going straight into the real world...... But over all I think T.D.A Was a pretty interesting book because now i know what a concentration camp was like when hitler was attempting to kill off all the jews.
ReplyDeletei really like your paragraph but a few things that you could change for next time is that one of your sentences is really long but not to long its just that it could be shortend over all graet job keep up the good work
DeleteA part I would like to change in the novel the 'Devils Arithmetic' would be in the beginning of the novel. Dont you think it would be more exciting if Aaron went with her? I would think so! He would be able to experience the adventure with Hannah and she wouldn't be alone or feel lonely. She would have company and at least she will know that her brother is beside her. It would also make it easier for her to believe that she is actually in the past.
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ReplyDeleteOne thing I would change in the book " The Devils Arithmetic " is that instead of just Hannah going into the past, her brother Aaron comes with her. I would change it because it would be more of an adventure and if they got separated in my opinion, it would be more exciting too! However, the change would mean, Hannah wouldn't be alone in her somewhat dream, as a result, she would be more responsible because now she has to watch over Aaron and make sure he stays alive in the camp. Therefore, both Hannah and Aaron know why it's so important to remember what the Nazis did to the Jewish religion. A question I have is, will Hannah and Aaron tell everyone they know about the Nazis and the camps? Or will they keep it to themselves?
One part in the book that i would like to change would be when hannah sees all the people been traeted unfarily because it wasnt fair because if she didnt see it she wouldnt of felt bad. but when she saw it she got to feel the way that all of the jewish people did and i felt sad when all of those people were shot and killed if i had to see that i wou;d be sad and scared because u wouldnt know if u were going to be next or not.
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, I would change the beginning of the story and how Hannah is sent to the past and enters another's body. She becomes Chaya and to me this dose not make a lot of sense. I would change this part of the story because in my opinion it dose not make sense to fall asleep and wake up in the past... obviously this happened because she needed to learn a lessen but what happened to here body in her time... did it just lay there or did it magically disappear for the time being? This beginning is a big part of the story and if it were not there the story would probably start with Chaya in here home and the story would not be as "fun" as it is before my changes but it would make a lot more sense. This change would also mean she did not have experiences as hannah and lots of thing throughout the story. This would probably cause major problems in the story and the novel would not be the book it is, but it would make more sense to me and probably others so i say it would be a good and bad change. Could Chaya possibly feel a connection with hannah? Would Chaya recognize the black trucks and cars at the wedding? Would Chaya be Chaya or would she be Chaya?
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Delete@Katniss Everdeen I really enjoyed reading your post but you said "would Chaya be Chaya or would she be Chaya" i got a little bit confused but i think you mean or would she be Hannah
Deleteother than that tiny mistake great job.
In my opinion I think the story is almost perfect one thing I wish could change is when Hannah and Gitl are part of the plan and Hannah drops that pair of shoes that belonged to the person with three fingers the thing I would like to change is that thet women with three fingers gets framed and gets in trouble I think thismore wouldn't change the story too much but give the story a bit more suspence.
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ReplyDeleteThe part I would change in this book, would be how in the end nobody but Aunt Eva and Hannah knew about what happened. I'm one of those people that don't like keeping secrets, and I would want everyone to know about this and realize that something incredible happened! I don't think this would affect the story much or the plot because it just changes the ending where Hannah is back in the real world.